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Multi-level editorial pass: tactical/operational/strategic improvements
Tactical (sentence-level) improvements:
- Applied Gopen's Sense of Structure principles throughout
- Improved topic-stress positioning and topic strings
- Strengthened verb choices and reduced passive voice
- Eliminated redundancy and improved parallel structure
- Tightened phrasing while maintaining technical precision
Operational (paragraph/section) improvements:
- Added roadmap sentences at section openings
- Improved transitions between paragraphs and subsections
- Strengthened coherence within sections
- Better signposting of three-mode classification
- Clearer flow from procedures → synthesis → verification
Strategic (document-level) improvements:
- Strengthened Heilmeier question alignment in each section
- Added forward and backward references between sections
- Improved document-level coherence and narrative flow
- Clarified how each section answers its Heilmeier questions
- Explicit connections: Sec 2 (gap) → Sec 3 (solution) → Sec 4-6 (validation/impact)
All changes preserve technical accuracy and maintain formal tone appropriate
for doctoral candidacy proposal.