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Multi-level editorial pass on thesis proposal
Three-pass editorial review:
TACTICAL (sentence-level):
- Applied Gopen's Sense of Structure principles
- Improved topic-stress positioning (key info at sentence end)
- Strengthened verb choices and tightened passive constructions
- Enhanced topic strings for better flow between related sentences
- Consolidated choppy passages into smoother prose
OPERATIONAL (paragraph/section):
- Improved transitions between subsections
- Enhanced coherence within sections
- Tightened paragraph-level flow
- Reorganized content for clearer logical progression
- Strengthened section endings and beginnings
STRATEGIC (document-level):
- Made Heilmeier questions explicit at section openings
- Improved alignment between section content and assigned questions
- Enhanced summary paragraphs answering Heilmeier questions
- Clarified how sections link to overall proposal structure
- Strengthened transitions between major sections
All changes maintain technical accuracy while improving clarity and impact.