Pass 1 (Tactical): Sentence-level improvements using Gopen principles
- Strengthened verbs and eliminated wordiness
- Converted passive to active voice where clearer
- Improved topic-stress positioning (old→new info flow)
- Enhanced sentence clarity and directness
Pass 2 (Operational): Paragraph and section flow
- Improved transitions between subsections
- Eliminated redundant transition phrases
- Enhanced coherence within sections
- Streamlined section introductions
Pass 3 (Strategic): Heilmeier catechism alignment
- Clarified 'What is new?' statements
- Strengthened 'What has been done?' / 'What are the limits?' framing
- Ensured proper linkage between sections
- Aligned language with Heilmeier questions throughout
Key improvements:
- Removed unnecessary methodology/approach qualifiers
- Tightened economic argument in Broader Impacts
- Clarified verification gap in State of the Art
- Strengthened success criteria statements
- Enhanced document-level coherence
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