Pass 1 (Tactical): Sentence-level improvements
- Strengthened issue-point positioning (stress at sentence end)
- Improved topic-stress flow (known→new information)
- Converted passive to active voice where appropriate
- Tightened verb choice and eliminated weak constructions
- Fixed pronoun references and reduced unnecessary nominalizations
Pass 2 (Operational): Paragraph and section flow
- Improved transitions between paragraphs and subsections
- Strengthened section-to-section handoffs
- Enhanced coherence within major sections
- Clarified the discrete-continuous interface explanation
- Better signposting for the three controller types
Pass 3 (Strategic): Heilmeier catechism alignment
- Made 'What is new' and 'Why will it succeed' explicit
- Strengthened 'Who cares' and 'What difference' in Broader Impacts
- Clarified 'The exams' in Metrics section
- Added 'How long' statement to Schedule
- Improved overall narrative flow from problem→gap→solution→impact
All changes preserve technical accuracy while improving clarity and impact.
Tactical (sentence-level):
- Strengthened weak verbs and passive constructions
- Improved issue-point positioning (old info first, new info in stress position)
- Removed unnecessary hedging phrases
- Fixed active/passive voice for clarity
Operational (paragraph/section):
- Added transition sentences between major subsections
- Strengthened flow between State of the Art and Research Approach
- Added connecting tissue between continuous controller types
- Improved coherence within outcomes section
Strategic (document-level):
- Made 'what's new' explicit with highlighted innovation statement
- Added summary paragraph to State of the Art defining the verification gap
- Strengthened connections between sections for Heilmeier alignment
- Clarified how the three-layer approach unifies existing tools
