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Editorial pass: Gopen structure + Heilmeier alignment
Three-pass editorial review:
TACTICAL (sentence-level):
- Improved topic-stress positioning throughout
- Changed weak 'cannot' to stronger 'fail to'
- Converted passive constructions to active voice
- Removed unnecessary em-dashes, replaced with commas/colons
- Split overly complex sentences for clarity
- Strengthened verb choices
OPERATIONAL (paragraph/section):
- Enhanced transitions between subsections
- Improved paragraph coherence and flow
- Added explicit backward references ('defined above', etc.)
- Clarified progression of ideas within sections
- Split semicolon-joined sentences for better rhythm
STRATEGIC (document-level):
- Made Heilmeier questions more explicit throughout
- Strengthened section-to-section bridges
- Ensured each section clearly answers its assigned questions
- Improved parallel structure in summaries
- Enhanced roadmap/signposting between sections
Focus: clarity and impact without changing technical content.
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