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46a7e63b45 Editorial pass: Three-level copy-editing (tactical/operational/strategic)
Pass 1 (Tactical - sentence level):
- Strengthened verb constructions (fail/lack vs cannot/will not)
- Improved topic-stress positioning
- Reduced weak passive voice
- Removed unnecessary future tense (will → present)
- Enhanced issue-point positioning per Gopen

Pass 2 (Operational - paragraph/section):
- Improved transitions between major sections
- Enhanced coherence within subsections
- Smoothed flow between State of Art → Research Approach

Pass 3 (Strategic - document level):
- Sharpened Heilmeier catechism alignment
- Clarified 'what difference it makes' (economic impact)
- Strengthened 'what is new' positioning
- Enhanced 'why it will succeed' specificity
- Improved 'how we measure success' clarity

All changes maintain technical accuracy while improving clarity and impact.
2026-03-09 12:37:50 -04:00
ab627264ac Editorial pass: tactical, operational, and strategic improvements
Tactical (sentence-level):
- Applied Gopen's principles: improved topic-stress positioning, stronger verbs
- Reduced passive voice and unnecessary modifiers
- Split long sentences for clarity and emphasis
- Tightened redundant phrasing throughout

Operational (paragraph/section):
- Added explicit transitions between subsections
- Improved flow within paragraphs (e.g., control scopes example)
- Created parallel structure for related concepts
- Enhanced coherence in State of the Art section

Strategic (document-level):
- Strengthened value proposition (higher vs same assurance)
- Improved Heilmeier alignment (why now, what's new, why it will succeed)
- Better linkage between State of the Art gap and research goals
- Connected economic motivation more explicitly throughout
2026-03-09 12:19:07 -04:00
Dane Sabo
c5e7784810 first commit 2026-02-06 20:23:52 -05:00