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1-goals-and-outcomes/research-statement.tex
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@ -9,13 +9,13 @@ Control Systems. Maybe removal of `formal'?}
Nuclear power relies on extensively trained operators who follow detailed Nuclear power relies on extensively trained operators who follow detailed
written procedures to manage reactor control.\dasinline{Why is there any written procedures to manage reactor control.\dasinline{Why is there any
hyphenation at all? Why not full justification?} Based on these procedures and hyphenation at all? Why not full justification?} Based on these procedures and
operators' interpretation of plant conditions, operators make critical decisions \oldt{operators'} \newt{their} interpretation of plant conditions, \oldt{operators} \newt{they} make critical decisions
about when to switch between control objectives. about when to switch between control objectives.
\splitinline{Consider: ``operators'' appears 3x in two sentences. Maybe: \splitinline{Consider: ``operators'' appears 3x in two sentences. Maybe:
``Based on these procedures and their interpretation of plant conditions, ``Based on these procedures and their interpretation of plant conditions,
they make critical decisions...''} they make critical decisions...''}
% Gap % Gap
But, reliance on human operators has created an economic challenge for \oldt{But, reliance} \newt{This reliance} on human operators has created an economic challenge for
next-generation nuclear power plants. next-generation nuclear power plants.
\splitinline{``But, reliance'' — the comma after ``But'' is unusual. Either \splitinline{``But, reliance'' — the comma after ``But'' is unusual. Either
drop it or restructure: ``However, this reliance...'' or ``This reliance, drop it or restructure: ``However, this reliance...'' or ``This reliance,
@ -24,8 +24,8 @@ however, has created...''}
Right to the topic.} Right to the topic.}
Small modular reactors face significantly higher per-megawatt staffing costs Small modular reactors face significantly higher per-megawatt staffing costs
than conventional than conventional
plants.\dasinline{Obvious but source required.} Autonomous control systems are plants.\dasinline{Obvious but source required.} Autonomous control systems \oldt{are
needed that can safely manage complex needed that can} \newt{must} safely manage complex
operational sequences with the same assurance as human-operated systems, but operational sequences with the same assurance as human-operated systems, but
without constant supervision. without constant supervision.
\splitinline{``are needed that can'' --- passive. Try: ``Autonomous control \splitinline{``are needed that can'' --- passive. Try: ``Autonomous control
@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ system.\dasinline{Where did this come from? Needs context.}
stages, then a new paragraph for the compositional verification point and stages, then a new paragraph for the compositional verification point and
Emerson demo.} Emerson demo.}
% Pay-off % Pay-off
This approach will demonstrate autonomous control can be used for complex This approach \oldt{will demonstrate autonomous control can be used for} \newt{enables autonomous management of} complex
nuclear power operations while maintaining safety nuclear power operations while maintaining safety
guarantees. guarantees.
\splitinline{``can be used for'' — weak. Try: ``...will demonstrate that \splitinline{``can be used for'' — weak. Try: ``...will demonstrate that
@ -114,10 +114,10 @@ If this research is successful, we will be able to do the following:
% Strategy % Strategy
We will implement this methodology on a small modular reactor simulation We will implement this methodology on a small modular reactor simulation
using industry-standard control hardware. % Outcome using industry-standard control hardware. % Outcome
Control engineers will be able to implement high-assurance autonomous Control engineers will be able to \oldt{implement high-assurance autonomous
controls on industrial platforms they already use, enabling users to controls on industrial platforms they already use, enabling users to
achieve autonomy without retraining costs or developing new achieve autonomy without retraining costs or developing new
equipment.\splitnote{Strong industrial grounding --- the ``platforms they equipment.} \newt{achieve autonomy without retraining costs or developing new equipment by implementing high-assurance autonomous controls on industrial platforms they already use.}\splitnote{Strong industrial grounding --- the ``platforms they
already use'' point is compelling for already use'' point is compelling for
adoption.}\dasinline{Flip the clauses. Put retraining adoption.}\dasinline{Flip the clauses. Put retraining
and new equipment before the comma, end with building and new equipment before the comma, end with building

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3-research-approach/approach.tex
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@ -399,7 +399,7 @@ continuous components. This section describes the continuous control modes that
execute within each discrete state, and how we verify that they satisfy the execute within each discrete state, and how we verify that they satisfy the
requirements imposed by the discrete layer. It is important to clarify the scope requirements imposed by the discrete layer. It is important to clarify the scope
of this methodology with respect to continuous controller design. This work of this methodology with respect to continuous controller design. This work
\dasinline{Verb tense: ``will verify''.}verifies continuous controllers; it does not synthesize them. The distinction \dasinline{Verb tense: ``will verify''.}\oldt{verifies} \newt{will verify} continuous controllers; it does not synthesize them. The distinction
parallels model checking in software verification: model checking does not tell parallels model checking in software verification: model checking does not tell
engineers how to write correct software, but it verifies whether a given engineers how to write correct software, but it verifies whether a given
implementation satisfies its specification. Similarly, we assume that continuous implementation satisfies its specification. Similarly, we assume that continuous